Remember Me Chapter 2 (update)

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  1. Basil Darkratte

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    I am still working on Chapter 2 of the story Remember Me. So don't worry, I didn't stop and pushed it to the side. Im still working out a few points in the chapter, so hold on just a little bit more.[​IMG]
    I have decided to show a small part of the Chapter here. Just to hold you until the rest comes

    Note: This is how it looks in the Chapter as of now, without any spelling corrections, or any changes.
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    " Er, Master Gibbs." Jack said

    " Aye, sir." Gibbs replied

    " Set a course to Torutga."

    " Aye, sir. 'ave what we came for?"

    " We do." Jack lowers his voice making sure no one else hears. " It's in
    my quaters now."

    " And the reason we be sailng to a wild port such as Tortuga?"

    " I have an old acquaintance to see, as it were."

    " And does this 'old acquaintance' have anything to do with that
    trinket?"

    " A trinket?" Jack takes a step back, " Is that what you call it? Let me
    remind you, I did not go through all this trouble-"

    " 'I' meaning that Hayes boy?" Said Gibbs.

    " I'm the one who has the compass, mate! So, technically, it was my
    burden, savvy?"

    " Aye Cap'n" Gibbs adjustes the ship's wheel, He looks forward.

    " As I was saying, I did not go through all that trouble for some
    trinket."

    " Ah, and since you went through all that trouble, I'm guessin' it be
    somethin' Valuable."

    " More than you will ever know, mate; It's a sword!"
    In the background, a pirate yells orders to the others.

    " A sword?" Said Gibbs

    " I believe that's what I said, mate, The Governor's Sword."

    " Are you meanin' to tell me, we risked a pirates life just for a bloody
    sword?"

    " Firstly!" Jack holds up one finger, " Hayes chose it; he knows the
    risk, Secondly!" He holds up another finger," He's a Pirate!, And
    Thirdly," Jack holds up two more fingers- a grand total of four
    fingers," It's more than a sword savvy?"

    " If it's more than a sword, then what is it?" Asked Gibbs.

    " I haven't the foggest. That's where my acquaintance comes in. Once he
    gives me what I need, we'll be on our way."

    " And he is going to give it to you just like that?"

    " If only things were that simple." Jack taps on the railing in front of
    the wheel," Nay, mate. The only way I'll get it from him is in a Poker
    game."

    " Now, Jack. You know your luck with Poker." Gibbs turns to face him. "
    What If something should go wrong?"

    " Son, what could possiably go wrong? I'm Captain Jack Sparrow."

    " Aye, that's exacly what I mean. The last time you said that, we were
    being chased by pirates you owned money to."
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  2. Jack Goldeagle

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    Awesome Basil looking fowrard to more[​IMG]
     
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  3. JadeOHayes

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    OUTSTANDING! [​IMG]When will the real movie come out? Eh, it's still a script, huh ... aww, I can already see it playing ...
     
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  4. Basil Darkratte

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    If only it could be turned in to a movie.... It would never get pass copyright[​IMG]
     
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  5. JadeOHayes

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    What's up with the copyright ... anybody can make a pirate movie, not just Disney, right? Just change the names of the sword, locations, characters ...
    What I'm thinking is, you should be able to 'sell' things like this to Hollywood to continue the sequel. Like Star Wars, even in backwards order. Just don't give up making good stories because you 'think' it's not gonna fly!
     
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  6. Basil Darkratte

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    I would have to change alot of things then.. maybe I can say it was based on Pirates of the caribbean, or I might give it to the writers of Pirates of the caribbean. The problem is ( and this may be a spoiler,) some of the things that will happen in the story would require some of the characters that were dead to be alive. A heads up. When reading my story forget everything you know about Pirates of the caribbean! lol
     
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