I just meant descriptors to add a bit of depth & color to the training, similar to the way you described the rich girl complaining about the bitter coffee.
I'm not sure where I got Drahnig's lectures from - maybe another flashback to Boot Camp...
But maybe something such as: "then reading, writing and listening to Drahnig regale us with stories of the trials and tribulations of the Heronican life we had signed up for..."
Just ideas Hector. My writing at work usually goes through 2 or 3 editing passes where the owner of my company tears it apart and has me re-write sections that I wrote in "Engineerese", so I've developed a pretty thick skin for "suggestions"
I really like where you're going with this though - already a fun read, and seems like it is going to turn into a great adventure!
Oh and by the way, Heronican's use more then just swordsChapter Four
Oh gods, take me back to basic testing! My rump hurts, my arm hurts, my legs hurt, my
everything hurts! Weapon training, survival training, war training, reading training, even cooking training! I have also learned about the Mercenaries, a rival group that were founded about 2 hundred years ago. A highly skilled boy, named Arhoth, was banished because of his violence and anger. While they were thinking of a way to test personality before teaching them to fight well( Later that turned out to be the 3 month training) he along with several other banished Heronicans they created the Mercenaries, which somehow, became well organized and often used by the public for services such as killing monsters and bandits. We do that for free, but they pay and get more jobs then us. We are always held in suspicion, while they are much more trusted, but still not entirely trusted( but nobody is these days).
My books said that their training was more then double the intensity of ours. I found that hard to believe. Are training was 12 hours a day, 2 hours altogether for eating, 8 hours for sleeping.
Six years later
Hello again. In these six years it was just train, train, and train. Now finally I am going on a mission. I, and my old mentor were going to defend a fort that was going to be attacked. Finally some action
The End.no more chapters until commentYou are probably laughing at me but here goes.
Chapter 5
The fort we are stationed at is small, but strong. It is on top of a hill with a wide grassy plains surounding it. Small, but good. According to our (The senior Heronicans) calculations, the enemy will attack tonight. WE spend the day preparing for the fight. I am busy sharping my daggers, spear, sword, axe, and dirk (A short sword blade on a dagger hilt). My fathers sword is too large and I left it at the Heronican Armory. Still Heronicans go armed sometimes literally to the teeth. My armor is a ringed leather tunic (iron rings sewn on a leather tunic), wool pants, Hard leather boots, an old iron conical helmet, a warcloak, and a wooden shield with an soft iron rim (for catching enemy swords).
Night
I can make out the enemy creeping towards the gate. I can hear them too. Muffled curses, jingling equipment, and hard boots stomping down on the cobblestones. I pick up my bow (forgot to mention I am an archer as well), string it, and wait for the signal.
The enemy is at the gates, I can hear them talking
" You said you would have that gate open in seconds, Brag."
Another said" The gate is newer then we thought."
An angry voice said" Out of my way! I'll open it myself!"
I felt more then heard him starting to cast magic. I almost snickered. We( I mean me too) had spent the previous day fortifying the gate with magic wards (A magic shield that can block magic) He had no chan-
Crash!
The force of the blast knocked me from the wall. I landed on a pile of straw, thinking" How could he be able to expand enough magical energy, and still be expected to fight?" Enemy fighters poured through the gate. I pulled up my bow which was still strung and fired several shots, and then someone about my height attacked me. I yanked out my sword and shield just in time to parry the foe's slash. I winced in pain at the force of his blow. He had a heavier sword then mine,but mine was slightly longer. We fought with swords, and it was nothing like anything I had been taught. He was fighting with more then his sword, he was punching, kicking, head-butting, elbowing,and kneeing me. He was fighting like he was insane. Then with an extra careful move, I managed to disarm him. As soon as he lost his sword, and shoved me ing the chest and knocked me down. When I got up, he had pulled out a long, black mace!2 new chapters and no new comments?