Our Souls were clean

[BicMax5050]

*Inspired from The devil and Tom Walker.Its about a group of people who are deceived into making a deal with Devil,and when the time to pay up comes,they regret it.*

Our souls were clean.
Our souls were free.
Our souls were loved.
That Snake had slithered out.
Our souls were hurt.
Our souls were desperate.
Our souls were sold.
The Fateful deal was made.
Our souls were prosperous.
Our souls were slaved.
Our souls were joyful.
The reaping was nigh.
Our souls were done.
Our souls were scared.
Our souls were darned.
That ancient Serpent deceived once more.

 

[Violet]

I love how you captured the whole story within a short amount of time; It was really good!

 

[BicMax5050]

Thanks,glad my art is appreciated.

 

[brianizweird]

Is it alright if I use this a little bit for one of my own stories? It's really well written, and needs no work at all, and maybe, can I use it, with a bit of changing of my own, make it into song lyrics that I will use in my story? Because it's a bit like my own stories that I've been writing lately; Dark, a bit on the scary side, interesting, intriguing, something about being caged inside, most of the characters have secrets that make them feel like monsters, etc. I'm trying to become an author.

 

[BicMax5050]

Sure.But if you ever give credit,remember me

 

[brianizweird]

Ok! I will most definitely put you in the acknowledgments, of the actual published book!

 

[BicMax5050]

Thanks

 

[brianizweird]

Thanks

no problem. Even though they aren't even close to being finished, you are welcome to see my books- they are in the Once Upon a Time... section.

 

[BicMax5050]

I'll try to give em a look sometime.

 

[brianizweird]

Ok!